There once lived Sun, Moon, and Wind. These were the children of their mother Star, who had just sent them off to dine and feast with their beloved friends. Sun and Wind were the oldest of the three children and were at times greedy and thought only of themselves. Moon on the other hand was humble and selfless. All three had enormous amounts of fun with their friends all the while eating exquisite foods. Sun and Wind ate until their stomachs gave out, but Moon was humble and selfless. Moon knew that their mother, Star, was waiting at home all alone for her sons to come home. With this in mind Moon brought back a little bit of everything for their mother. When the sons arrived back home, their mother asked them what they had brought back for her. In ignorance, Sun and Wind told their mother that nothing was brought back for her because they were out with their friends to have a good time and not think about home or what to bring back. Moon, on the other hand, brought back a little bit of everything for their dear mother. Star saw what kind of children she had brought to this world and cursed Sun and Wind to all of eternity. Sun was to be high in the sky where its rays will burn anything it touches causing people to avoid it. Wind was to blow through the hot and scorching weather, shriveling and parching all things in its path. She then turned to Moon and told her that she will be high in the nights sky. She will be bright, cool, and beautiful for people will always say that Moon is blessed.
(Sun, Moon, and Wind, Source: Kidsgen)
Author's Notes:
The original story was exactly the same as the bedtime story told in this rendition. Nothing changed except for how the story was told. The lesson behind this story was very strong in my opinion and can be applied to most people who grow up or get anger at their mothers. In my version, I had the father tell his son the story of Sun, Moon, and Wind and how they went out with their friends to dine and feast and have fun. The son had caused problems for his mother earlier that day and I wanted this story to be told to him as a lesson.
Bibliography: "How Sun, Moon, and Wind Went Out to Diner" by Joseph Jacobs. Web Source
What a cute story! I loved how the boy didn't understand the moral, but when it was explained to him, he immediately knew what he had done wrong and tried to make up for it. Since there's no dialogue in the story, maybe there could be dialogue between the father and son? But maybe I only say that because I love kids and love the outlandish things they say!
ReplyDeleteHey Charles!
ReplyDeleteThe image you use in your story is really cool! I liked the storytelling element of your story as well. It made me feel like I was a kid again and my dad was reading me bedtime stories. I think it might be cool to incorporate a little more of the mom since the mom/kid interaction was the thing that inspired the storytelling in the first place. It doesn't have to be a lot, just a little scene at the beginning and the end! If you don't want to do that then that's fine, but I think explaining how the child was being difficult would be helpful! Great job!
This was such an adorable story! I could picture the little boy running to his mom to hug her and apologize. You tied in the story and moral seamlessly together and it made for a great story. I think this is a lesson that all kids should be reminded of regularly! Overall, the story was a nice read and I think the image complemented your story well.
ReplyDeleteCharles,
ReplyDeleteI really like the story and was not aware of the original from the Indian Fairy tales. I like how you had the father tell the son the story so that he could learn a lesson. I think I would have been nice to hear what the little boy might have done that morning to where he ignored his mother and misbehaved. The little bit of background could even have related to the Sun, Wind, and Moon story like the little boy not helping his mother clean up after breakfast but rushing off to play with his friends instead. Great story!